Vanelin


 * Hi Vanelin, good luck in the exam Friday. Here is the final draft of your Graph Description. **

The graph shows the monthly statistics of Exercise machines maintenance at Gymtastic Fitness Club between January and July 2009. Overall, there was a sharp fall from 33per month in January to 14 per month in July.

Between January and February, March and April, June and July, there were rises. From February to March, there was a slight fall, but between April and May, there was a sharp fall from 75 to 33. However, there was also a sharp fall from 33 to 12 from May to June.

Between March and June, there was a big fluctuation. However, in June there was a fantastic result, with just 12 exercise machines needing to be maintained.

In conclusion, it is clear to see that, after replacing the old machines, more and more machines did not need to be maintained.

P10 Personal profile

My name is Vanelin, I am 19 years old. I was born in Jieyang, a small city in Guangdong province, I am a Chinese, my mother language is Chaoshan language well and truly, but I can speak Mandarin and Cantonese as well. I live with my family and I was the youngest person in my family, there are 6 numbers of my family, my parents, grandmother, 2 elder brothers. I just graduated from high school this year and I want to study at RMIT University in Melbourne, but I must study English lesson for a start and improve it. I want to be a designer, it is my dream.

P16 Write a short paragraph stating who you agree with 80 words

I agree with ‘Digital revolution in the classroom’.

In my opinion, I think new technology is good for education. For example, teacher can taught students more information when they are using computer in the class. I think the old way would waste of time, because teacher must write down knowledge on the blackboard. In addition, I think it will let to understand more detailed knowledge from the computer on time. I think the new technology will make our class becomes more funny.

P22 Write an email

Dear Mr. Bhavinder

Thank you for your calling and leave me the message at Helix language school.

I would like to tell you some information about what Helix can offer. However, this course is 5 weeks long and 2 hours a day. Actually, the teacher can come to BTI bank office, but need a big room. I would be very interested in hearing about any questions with this course. If you have not any question, please let me know. Thank you very much.

Kind regards,

Bjorn Donaldson

P25 Write a summary about Jose

Jose has a pretty good time at his school, his favourite subject is music and he has a band at school. His favourite teacher is Ms. Harrison because she got him interested in music. He is not a good student because he always thinking about the music. The school concert is his big memory at this high school.

P28 Write a summary about yourself

My schooldays was very funny because I could stay with my best friend in the same classroom. I like my teacher who name is Sonny, she is important to me because she let me understood a lot of things. Actually I was not a good student because I did not like to study except art. I love to draw and enjoy it. My deep memory is my graduation ceremony that is unforgettable.

P33 Write a story

My story

I remember very clearly how I learnt to played the piano. When I was at the age of seven, my cousin came to my home and showed me the video about her piano lesson, it seems very interested, and I wanted to learned, too. Lucky my father agreed with me and bought the piano for me on the next day. Then I went to the music school and learned how to play the piano. I felt excited as I pressed key down.

First, the teacher showed me how to play a song perfectly. It seems easy, but when I pressed the key I felt hard. Then the teacher taught me the right way to played it. Before that, I must to remember the whole tones, it was hard for me that I was just remembered a few tones after some days.

After that, the teacher told me how to play the piano with the right gesture. I felt tired within this gesture. I could not do it very well, so my teacher always scolded me. I felt sad and cried a few days. I did not want to go to school again, but my mother always encouraged me and felt better.

Finally, I went to school and studied hard because my mother’s encouragement. After that, I was never give up. After more days, I could play a simple song perfectly. My family was proud of me.

P58 Write 5 sentences about your city

Canton Tower is one of the most famous buildings in China, being taller than the Shun hing square building. The canton tower is the tallest building in Guangdong province, being 610 meters high.

It has the highest revolving restaurant in China, which is 424 meters high.

There has an ‘air the post office’, is the highest post office in the world.

The elevator inside in the canton tower is faster than other countries.

P65 Rewrite sentences

a. We send the client the plans.

--We send the plans to the client.

b. We give an estimate to the clients.

--We give the clients an estimate.

c. The client gives us an answer.

--The client gives an answer to us.

d. We send the plans to the council for approval.

--We send the council the plans for approval.

e. We take the builder the plans.

--We take the plans from the builder.

P69 Plan and Write a paragraph

Plan—Hakka round house

Today I will talk about a traditional house in my country. Nowadays Hakka round house is the national key units of cultural relics in China. We can find it in Guangdong province of China easily.

This house has had good withstand effect, is very solid, soil is stuck up glutinous rice, very strong. In order to prevent the beast, and foreign attacks, most are the Hakka people together in the family.

This house be fit for live because very safe and comfortable. The first and the second floors have no windows, just have some loophole. We know, the weather is very nice in Guangdong province that it is good to stay and live.

Hakka round house has a long history at least 300 years ago. You can see the Hakka people very polite and united. They are very eager when you need their help. You can feel the history breath easily in this place.

P72 Write a paragraph about your dream house

My dream house

My dream house is the modern house. I would like a lot of plants at this house, it is not only seems beautiful also good for our health. I would like my house made of glass, in order to I can enjoy the sunshine if I want. The house have a big roof mode of concrete, it can shade for me when the sunshine is very strong. Furthermore, this roof can solar power, it is good for environmental protection. A big garden is around the house, in front the house has a pool and a large place can enjoy the BBQ or gardening.

My house must have a big living room, every night we can sit there and enjoy the family time. I would like the dining room and the kitchen at the same room, it will make this family close and sweet when mother cook the another families can sit at the dining room and talk to her. I would like this house have 5 or 6 bedrooms and also have big windows, every bedrooms have their own bathroom and toilet, it is very convenience. By the way, if have a gym room it will be better. What is more, this house is in the countryside, the air is very fresh. Actually, if I can stay with my family, there will be the best house.

Hi Vanelin, hope your preparations for your writing exam are going well. Word form, prepositions, referent links and sentence construction are the main areas you need to improve. Also, make sure you follow the Essay Structure very, very carefully.

Vanelin

Topic-They should bring back Capital Punishment in Australia

To bring back or abolish Capital Punishment is a big topic under discussion by people in Australia. Some people think that because Capital Punishment can stop someone to make big mistakes and reduce the happening of the crime, the government should to bring it back. However, others think that Capital Punishment is extreme ly cruel, now is a civiliz ed times, we must to abolish this regulation. I believe that they should bring back Capital Punishment in Australia for two main reasons.

The first reason is that, nowadays, violent crime is still on the rise at some places, lots of people hate that and they think kill people should pay with life, this is a traditional concept. If government abolishes Capital Punishment, the public security situation will tend to worse. For instance, the government of America abolished Capital Punishment in 1967, after then, more and more crime happened and lots of public wanted to bring back the regulation, the government could not stop this act and then brought back the Capital Punishment. Furthermore, we know so many crime of gun was happened in Australia, it is dreadful thing. It seems to me that Capital Punishment should bring back in Australia.

Secondly, punishment as a social phenomenon, has some people cannot control and transfer of the objective laws. It is more reflected that everyone is equal. We know, some people will do something dangerous after they drinking, it is easily to see the accident about someone killed people after he drank. Much alcohol violence had happened in Australia, we must to care this thing and worried about that. But, if bring back Capital Punishment, I believe that will reduce the crime happen.

In conclusion, it is my belief that they should bring back Capital Punishment in Australia, it will let this country becoming safety and friendly.