Ahmed

The graph shows how many exercise machine breakdowns occurred between January and July in 2009. Overall,
 * Hi Ahmed, good luck in the exam Friday. Here is the reworked draft of your Graph Description. Please give an overall trend. **

There was a slight increase in the number of breakdowns from 33 in January to 37 in February, but this number decreased slightly to 35 in March. However, there was a rapid rise in the number of machine breakdowns to 75. The difference between April and June was approximately 63, which was a great result. The machine breakdowns dropped sharply in these months. There was a slight rise from 12 to14 at the end.

In conclusion, April showed the highest number in growth. However, the number of machine breakdowns dropped quickly from April to June because they replaced more than half their machines.

Module A Hi Ahmed, hope your preparations for your writing exam are going well. You have used Essay Structure and planning very well here, so be sure to keep doing it for the exam. However, you seem to be forgetting to use “is” or “are” and you’re not paraphrasing the topic into your own words.

People are  interested with learning, whether it is  by classroom or online. Some people think classrooms are  better than online courses . I believe online is a better way of learning than in the classroom for two important reasons.

Firstly, online learning allows you to study very easy and is  very exciting. In addition, online learning helps you to improve any skill if you want in your home. For instance, if I want to learn new thing, just go to website learning and take what you want. Furthermore, online learning give to you long time of free time so you do not have to discipline every day. For example, choose which program do you thing is useful and access if you have free time.

<span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 21px;">Secondly, online learning allow to every one to how can to learn, what you want to learn and choose which subject you need. In addition, people, how work long time, they can log in and learn what they want. For example, a doctor, nurse, businessperson and manager, they work may be from nine to five if one of them need to learn, they can learn in their own time by on line learning. What’s more, students, who cannot attend to their school, whatever the reason, they log in to website and find their lecture. For instance some sickness, deafness and blindness, it is difficult for them coming to the classroom every day so they need take rest in their houses.

<span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 21px;">In conclusion, it is my belief that online learning is better than classroom. People always love the easy ways to take thing so online learning allowed to them to learn very easily. In fact online learning also allowed to everyone to learn, whatever his age. I think the online learning will develop everybody in the world.

P10 Your profile - write a personal profile 50 words My name is Ahmed Alanazi, I’m 25 years old. I’m from Saudi Arabia. My home town is Riyadh, the capital city in my country. I am married and I have a son, his name is Rayan. He is a year and a few days. I moved to Australia six month ago for study. I live in Melbourne with my family. I study English language at REW, in my opinion it’s a good place to improve your language. I’ll study bachelor degree at RMIT University in Melbourne in environment science. I really like spend my time with my family. Sometimes I love shopping and going trip. I really interested in playing soccer every week with my friends. I always hope to be a doctor or engineering about environment in the future. I worked for government 4 years ago at environmental health management. However, I am an ambitious and proud person to studying this science. In addition I studied environment protection at Technology College in Riyadh for two years and half. My favourite food is Kabsa, pasta, seafood and Sambosa, it’s famous food in Ramadan's month.I love every thing in my life because I get experience. I think every body need to be patient.

P16 Write a short paragraph stating who you agree with 80 words Capital letters - digital revolution in the classroom I would like to write about mu opinion. I think the digital revolution in the classroom is a good way to study for several reasons. The fiest reason is that, __People__ who work from nine to five can study in their own time. For example, a doctor and nurse thy work in a __hospital. They__ work a long time may be some of them wants to develop skills in any thing, they can study online in their own time. The second reason is, people can’t attend school whatever the reason, they can log in online learning websites and programmes. For example I study at REW we have special website to all the classmate called Wikispaces. We can get every thing we want and if you get sick and you can’t attend just look at Wikispaces website. I believe the education now is better than before. Very good, Ahmed. I have spaced out your paragraph to show your supporting sentences and facts, details and example sentences. Remember to put a comma after Signal Markers! Try to make your example sentences for the first reason into a single sentence using relative clauses. Waiting...

P22 Write an email Dear Mr. Bhavinder Singh Thank you for your interest ed to in our classes and thanks a lot for your staff at BTI for discipline. We would like to tell you about what your staff need to improve ment. __nowadays, we have a__ new writing __class. We__ can teach your staff in their offices. The length for a course is 4 weeks, 2 hours a day. If you __are agree__ please send a message to us. Kind regards, __ _Donaldson, Manager, __ arranging classes __ Helix international __

__ P25 Write a summary about Jose __ __ Jose Sanchez, what he said about his school days. __ __ He is a famous singer. His latest album is School Days. __ __ He studied in small high school in his country. His school had only one hundred students. __ __ Jose was not a very good student. His favourite subjects were music and science. He was very interested on this subjects. __ __ His favourite teacher was Mr Harrison, he was taught moths to the class. Mr Harrison got Jose interested in music. __ __ He had many friends in his school. The best friend of him was Don Vargess. He remember the end of school, when he and his friends stand on stage out door and about 15 dogs came around them and started howling! __ __ Other students could not heard Jose and his group, they started laughing for a long time. __ __ Ahmed, you need to employ Relative Clauses here. This is why I set it for practice. Go back to your textbook and apply the rules. __ __ P28 Write a summary about yourself __ __ My school days in high were the best time in that time. __ __ My high school located in the centre of neighbourhood and it was look like a __medium size. There __ware approximately 500 student and there was a beautiful fountain in front of the building. __ __ my favouritesubject was chemistry because my teacher, who tough this subject, made me interested with. __ __ My favourite teachers were a lot of them Majeed, Kazi, Ahmed and the best of them was Yosif, he was a great guide to me in high school. __ __ I had lots of friend there, they were very friendly. My best friend was Sultan, he was always helps me when I need him. __

__ P33 Write a story __ __ I remember very clearly how I learnt to drive a car. __ __ I was about fourteen or fifteen years old. While I was playing in the street my friend came to our neighbourhood in his brother’s car in the after noon. His name was Abdo and he was my best friend. Abdo had stolen his brother’s car and said to me “come with me”. I was surprised by him because he didn’t know how to drive a car. I kept saying, “let me drive, let me drive”, until finally he agreed. __ __ I remember that the weather was really hot and the sun was blazing. I started driving for a short distance and I felt really scared. After that, I went to our street, where a lot of our friends were. I felt very proud and drove very fast, but suddenly I crashed into a house wall. Our friends started laughing and didn’t stop for a long time. Abdo was crying and I was frustrated. Finally, after a few years from the time that happened, I learnt how to drive very well with my brother. But, I’ll never forget that day. HAHAHAHAHAHA! Very funny! __

__ P58 Write 5 sentences about your city __ __ The Kingdom tower is the tallest tower in my country. __ __ The Kingdom tower is shorter than Mile high tower. __ __ The Kingdom tower is the most beautiful tower in my country. __ __ The Kingdom tower has a lot of shops there. __ __ The Mile high tower is more expensive than the kingdom tower. __

__ P65 Rewrite sentences __ __ 1- We send the plans to clients. __ __ 2- We give to the clients an estimate. __ __ 3- The client gives an answer to us. __ __ 4- We send to the council the plans for approval. __ __ 5- We take the plans to the builder. __

__ P69 Plan and Write a paragraph __

__ The tents are __replaces__ A tent is an ideal home for the Bedouin people of the middle east and northern Africa. For start, these areas do not have enough resources or building materials. For example, the people there have no wood, no electricity and no iron so, they use tents as a temporary shelter from the weather. The tent is made of silk, clothes and a little bit of iron to firm the tent. The middle east and northern Africa is very hot in the summer. In addition, the average temperature there is 50 °C. Amazingly, the Bedouin people live in the tents to protect themselves. There are many different shapes and different sizes. The smallest and lightest tents can be carried by backpacker for a long distances and are easy to move. Furthermore, some people use the tents for recreation camping trip. There are six windows and four doors to allowed the air make the weather cool. Finally, tents as many as fifteen people can live in a tent.

P72 Write a paragraph about your dream house ** My dream house **

I wish my dream house is a house in the my country. It is modern house. I want be a beautiful, big and white house. My dream house should be has swimming pool and medium garden because I love swimming and take a relax. I hope my dream house is the most beautiful house and has three doors made of glasses. I hope my dream house has five bedroom, two bathroom, living room, dining room and guestroom. I would like my dream house is on three street. I think it’ll be a very nice house.

Congratulations, Ahmed! You’ve finished your homework!! I’ll update your essay tomorrow…