Tomoko+Takahashi

p72

My dream house is not small. location is in suburb. It is highi-class residential area. My house is buautifule and mordern. In summer it is cool. In winter it is warm. It has 3bed rooms, 2bath rooms, living room and kitchin. It has libraly, because I like reading. It has a soundproof chamber, because sometimes I play piano. I have a small dog. she likes walking. There is my house near the park. There is a station near my house,because I like travel. My house has small pond. It keeps carps,goldfish and other fish. I watch them from my kitchin's window. My house has a roof. Ican have afternoon tea with my friends. I like driving. Car park is in the basement. My best friend lives in the next door. We have dinner with each other at both of our houses.

Hi Tomoko, I like your dream house. It sounds very practical and you have put a lot of thought into it. You need to write longer sentences, with relative clauses and conjunctions, so I have separated your sentences so you can more easily choose which ones to join together. You also need to write your story using Microsoft Word, then copy it into Wikispaces. Thom

17,08,2011 Tomoko

P16 I think technology is bad for students.Becouse there are two reasons.firstly,technology is too expensive.Forexample,electricty fee,hardwear fee and soft wear fee.It pay their guardian.Their guardian must make a lot of money.secondly,technology is too much makes their sight poor.A lot of students wearing grasses.in conclusion there are many reasons I think technology is bad for students. Tomoko.